Higher - Textual Analysis

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[9:03] You: what we doing, Michael?
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[9:03] Student006 Meredith: textual analysis
[9:03] You: kool
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[9:04] You: prose, poetry, drama?
[9:04] You: NAB?
[9:04] Student006 Meredith: NAB..grrr
[9:04] You: lol EASY when ?
[9:04] Student006 Meredith: she never said the exact date
[9:04] Student006 Meredith: jst soon lol
[9:05] You: it's always soon!
[9:05] You: right cmon
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[9:06] You: take a seat
[9:06] You: magic
[9:07] You: right with you
[9:07] You: what you been doing - which genre?
[9:08] Student006 Meredith: fiction novels
[9:08] You: ok good
[9:08] You: Great Expectations?
[9:08] Student006 Meredith: mrs havisham is she in that??
[9:10] You: you ready?
[9:10] Student006 Meredith: yip
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[9:12] You: right FICTION!
[9:12] You: main aspects?
[9:12] Student006 Meredith: as in??
[9:13] You: ok Narrative Voice
[9:13] You: how many?
[9:13] You: you there, Michael?
[9:14] Student006 Meredith: yeh, i'm not sure what your meaning though
[9:14] You: OK First person
[9:15] You: Third-person (Hey, just tell me when you don't understand something, ok bud?
[9:15] Student006 Meredith: awrite yes
[9:15] You: good
[9:15] You: First-person sees verything through ONE of the characters' eyes
[9:15] Student006 Meredith: yip
[9:16] You: Third person - generally - can see everything within the story, but can also get inside the characters' thought/minds
[9:16] Student006 Meredith: kl
[9:16] You: OK, textual analysis - can you tell me (look behind you!) which aspects on the grid relate to PROSE Fiction
[9:17] You: FIG LANG.
[9:17] You: WORD CHOICE
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[9:18] Student006 Meredith: kl
[9:19] You: STUse the force, Luke
[9:20] You: all of these, with the exception of Rhythm and Rhyme
[9:20] Student006 Meredith: lol
[9:20] You: Add to the grid, Setting
[9:20] You: Character
[9:20] You: Plot
[9:20] You: Theme
[9:20] You: Symbolism
[9:20] You: (Symbolism belongs in the blue box)
[9:20] You: ok
[9:21] Student006 Meredith: klkl
[9:21] You: when you do Textual Analysis, you are focusing on the language
[9:21] Student006 Meredith: right
[9:22] You: had any practice TA?
[9:22] Student006 Meredith: jst the once looked at 2 questions
[9:22] You: can you remember what features they were analysing?
[9:22] Student006 Meredith: IS gret expectations the one with Pip and Ms Havisham??
[9:23] Student006 Meredith: great*
[9:23] You: yup
[9:23] Student006 Meredith: thats the one we looked at
[9:23] You: OF COURSE Pip!
[9:23] You: lol
[9:23] Student006 Meredith: lol
[9:23] You: you can imagine a lot about him just from his name
[9:24] You: ok
[9:24] You: I have it here, but it's not been scanne
[9:24] You: d
[9:24] You: lol
[9:24] Student006 Meredith: we are looking at Glasgow Sonnets aswell
[9:24] You: Remember the questions/numbers?
[9:24] You: Glasgow Sonnet - easy
[9:24] Student006 Meredith: yip
[9:25] You: Sonnet title is unusual
[9:25] Student006 Meredith: i know
[9:25] You: Sonnet normally associated with love or romanticism
[9:25] You: two parts
[9:25] Student006 Meredith: yip
[9:25] You: 8 + 6
[9:25] You: inside/outside
[9:25] Student006 Meredith: first 8 lines and last 6
[9:25] You: so, which one was the easiest
[9:26] Student006 Meredith: first 8
[9:26] You: lol
[9:26] Student006 Meredith: octet
[9:26] You: lol
[9:26] You: no, Great Expectations OR G.Sonnet
[9:27] Student006 Meredith: lol=))
[9:27] Student006 Meredith: well, we looked at Glasgow Sonnets in full so that was the easiest we never done all the questions on great expectations
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[9:28] Student006 Meredith: klkl
[9:31] You: http://www.vscoted.com/materials/English/General/Poetry/Edwin Morgan/1 Glasgow Sonnet #1.mp3
[9:31] You: OR click the music tab
[9:31] You: up above the 'Shout' tab
[9:32] You: you should be ok
[9:33] You: with Great Expectations - it's a good NAB
[9:33] Student006 Meredith: klkl
[9:33] You: any other thoughts?
[9:33] Student006 Meredith: nope
[9:33] You: really, GE is all about Word Choice, Sentence Structure - how you feel about the characters presented to you
[9:33] Student006 Meredith: klkl
[9:34] You: any essays needing looked at?
[9:35] Student006 Meredith: i'll email one to you my personal study
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[9:41] You: I'm adding the NAB
[9:41] Student006 Meredith: ok:D
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[9:46] You: kool
[9:46] You: ?
[9:46] Student006 Meredith: yip cheers:D
[9:47] You: doddle
[9:47] Student006 Meredith: easy
[9:47] You: wanna try 3b and 4?
[9:48] Student006 Meredith: why not
[9:49] Student006 Meredith: 3b
[9:49] Student006 Meredith: its a list describing Ms Havisham and how she looks
[9:49] You: yup
[9:50] Student006 Meredith: dashes are used
[9:50] Student006 Meredith: to introduce additional information about the material
[9:50] Student006 Meredith: and about where her other shoe is
[9:51] You: aha
[9:51] You: but what do they achieve?
[9:51] You: remember, Pip is older and telling us a story that he remembers from childhod
[9:52] Student006 Meredith: they let us know that thats Pips fondest memory of her?
[9:52] You: close
[9:52] Student006 Meredith: or most vivid memory
[9:52] You: tmmmmm
[9:52] You: remember - - = parenthesis
[9:52] You: additional information
[9:53] You: without which the sentence would still make sense
[9:53] You: can you detect that they are adding detail as it comes into Pips mind?
[9:53] Student006 Meredith: aw
[9:53] Student006 Meredith: a said that theyu add additional information
[9:53] You: almost breathless
[9:53] You: yeah
[9:53] You: that's why they are used, but you have to relate their use to the passage IN CONTEXT
[9:54] Student006 Meredith: kl
[9:54] Student006 Meredith: so its like the list but as he remembers somthing about somthing on the list he adds that
[9:54] You: and 'and' conveys the breathless retelling of the boy
[9:54] You: listing is also used
[9:54] You: yes, springing into mind
[9:55] You: see it?
[9:55] Student006 Meredith: yip
[9:55] You: good
[9:55] You: 4
[9:55] You: try 4
[9:55] You: Repetition
[9:56] You: focus on that one first
[9:57] Student006 Meredith: he notices that everything is not that it should be
[9:57] Student006 Meredith: ' I saw'
[9:58] You: good
[9:58] You: repeats personal experience
[9:58] Student006 Meredith: yeh
[9:59] You: nxt
[9:59] You: sent struc
[10:00] Student006 Meredith: complex sentences
[10:00] You: But'
[10:00] You: 'but'
[10:01] Student006 Meredith: first about the colour being faed description of this
[10:01] You: climax?
[10:01] Student006 Meredith: then about the woman
[10:01] Student006 Meredith: he used but and commas
[10:02] Student006 Meredith: thats all i got
[10:02] You: yeah but relate bak to passage
[10:03] Student006 Meredith: he thinks at first that they are white and bright and new
[10:03] You: anti-climax
[10:03] Student006 Meredith: but then he notices uopon further inspection that they are faded
[10:03] Student006 Meredith: and old
[10:04] Student006 Meredith: this brings us to a conclusion thatit is not the woman we first expected
[10:05] You: magic
[10:05] You: word choice now?
[10:05] Student006 Meredith: it says two?
[10:05] Student006 Meredith: lol
[10:06] Student006 Meredith: 'ought' to be white
[10:07] You: ought
[10:07] Student006 Meredith: brings us back again to the previous paragraph and hoe we thought that her dress would be white
[10:07] You: good
[10:07] You: lost lustre
[10:07] Student006 Meredith: double L
[10:08] Student006 Meredith: aalliteration
[10:08] You: mmm yeah
[10:08] You: but focus on appearance and reality
[10:08] You: contrast
[10:09] Student006 Meredith: what does lustre mean??
[10:09] You: withered shrunk sunken - not associated with a bride
[10:09] You: RIGHT !!!
[10:09] You: must goo young man
[10:09] You: ssamme next week?

Higher Close Reading

Standard Grade - RMed - Gladiator & W1 The Homeless

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[9:14] Student004 Meredith: ive got my essys on my pen drive with me
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[9:14] You: shall we take a look, then?
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[9:17] You: ok which essay to start with?
[9:17] Student004 Meredith: galiator
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[9:17] You: do you know how to create a notecard?
[9:18] Student004 Meredith: yep just trying to send it
[9:18] You: kool
[9:18] You: (well done!)
[9:20] Student004 Meredith: i cant send it from the note card
[9:20] You: locate the notecard in the inventory list and then drag it onto my avatar
[9:20] Student004 Meredith: Gladiator Alexander Will Gladiator is a film set in Rome it is about a roman soldier who becomes a Gladiator and makes Rome a republic again. The soldier who does all this is called Maximus he’s a family man who becomes a soldier then he’s a slave and then be forced to be a Gladiator. The director shows us that Maximus is a Roman General because the clothes he wears are all has fur and are all very grand. A Maximus fight very well when he is fighting the director has slowed down and speeds up the film so that we get the real feel about the way he fights. Also Maximus is unlike the other Roman General because he talks to them, he fight with them he also eats with them he treats everyone the same way so he thinks that every one is equal. Maximus is a farmer before he was a soldier and in the film when he is alone fighting we often see leitmotif. He is looking / touching nature this shows us that he is at one with nature and he is connected with nature because when he is about to fight he picks up dirt /
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[9:21] You: i'll create a notecard then pass to you OK
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[9:21] You: nice one
[9:22] Student004 Meredith gave you New Note.
[9:22] Student004 Meredith: thanks
[9:23] Student004 Meredith: do u want all of my other essays
[9:23] You: do the same, yeah
[9:23] Student004 Meredith: ok
[9:24] You: I'll we'll review Gladiator just now
[9:25] You: Alex, do you want me to walk through this essay with uou?
[9:26] Student004 Meredith: ok
[9:26] You: first para.
[9:27] You: "a family mand and brave, courageous soldier who is forced into slavery and then becomes a fearless gladiator"
[9:28] You: ok?
[9:28] Student004 Meredith: yep
[9:28] You: 2nd para
[9:28] You: The director, Ridley Scott,
[9:29] You: alters the speed of the shots (i.e. he uses slow motion and normal motion(
[9:30] You: Mise-En-Scene - Maximus is pictured at close quarters with his men, showing that he is one of them and one who respects democracy, even in the military
[9:30] Student004 Meredith: yep
[9:31] You: ...and the director's use of leitmotif maintains this connection with the land, just as he does with his grounded relationship with his fellow soldiers
[9:31] Student004 Meredith: yes
[9:32] You: OK, I've changed the tense
[9:32] You: of the verbs here ok
[9:32] You: When Maximus finds his wife and child dead, he is so upset that he buries them by himself and lies down beside them, wanting to die with them because of his huge grief. This is linked to the leitmotif because he is walking though his field on his home, and again conveys the connection he has with the land, to where he must return his family.
[9:33] You: Dont worry, I'm making changes to the Notecard and will give you the finished copy
[9:33] Student004 Meredith: right ok thats fine
[9:34] You: In the film Maximus thinks that the most important thing to him is...
[9:34] You: BIG sentence
[9:34] Student004 Meredith: right
[9:34] You: the first part of this para. is repeating itself
[9:35] Student004 Meredith: ok
[9:36] You: whose the bad guy?
[9:36] Student004 Meredith: comudus
[9:36] Student004 Meredith: commodus
[9:36] Student004 Meredith: soz
[9:37] You: ok anything between [ ] is for you to insert your comments ok
[9:37] Student004 Meredith: right
[9:38] Student004 Meredith: brb
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[9:41] You: kool
[9:41] Student004 Meredith accepted your inventory offer.
[9:42] You: you haven't included some of the excellent Film Technique elements that we discussed before - do you still have those ntoes?
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[9:42] Student004 Meredith: dshould do
[9:43] You: ok, go through your essay and identify where you could say more about the film technique(s) used
[9:43] You: next essay!?
[9:45] Student004 Meredith gave you New Note.
[9:46] You: nice one
[9:46] Student004 Meredith: thanks
[9:47] You: there have
[9:47] You: in first l;ine
[9:49] You: Homelessness By Alexander Will Homeless people are people who used to live in a home but there have been some problems involving them and their with family, money, drugs or alcohol. These are just some of reasons that people might leave home, often ending up sleeping rough on the streets because of these problems. This is such a big problem in our society because many people have lost not only their house because of eviction, but they often lose their families and self-esteem - often their mental health. In this essay I will look at why they became homeless and attempt to offer some solutions to solve the problem of becoming homeless.
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[9:50] You: LIKE
[9:50] You: For instance, for example
[9:51] Student004 Meredith: how to get there life back to normAL how to get off drugs and alchol
[9:54] You: ne reason for becoming homeless is due to money problems. For example. when they lose their job and have no money to pay the bills or keep up with rent for the house/flat. This often leads to debt and they end up losing their posessions - valuables and furniture being seized by bailiffs. In the end they will lose their home and will have to move into a friend / family home or live on the streets until they find a job. Or end up staying like that for the rest of your life. Another reason for people becoming homeless is drugs. Drugs are addictive and can sometimes kill those who take them. Also, when someone take drugs they can run into debt trying to buy them, and they could attract people like drug dealers to their house or place of work wanting money from them. In the end, they lose their job because of this, their home, and then its time for life on the streets.
[9:55] Student004 Meredith: yes
[9:56] You: now, look out for my use of - -
[9:57] You: where between the - - is extra information
[9:57] You: ok
[9:57] You: I think that young teenagers become homeless because of things that have been happening at home - often outwith their control -such as physical and/or mental abuse from parents or another family member. They don’t know what happens to people on the streets, and often they end up on the streets where the can get attacked by drunken people, or sexually sexual assaulted by other homeless people or sexual predators; young females are sometimes forced into prostitution, and often this is to support a drug habit.
[9:59] You: Our society does not deal with homeless people because we think that they are on drugs so that why don’t give them money. When they ask us for money we don’t give them it because we pretend that they are not there. We have a view that they take up the beds in hospitals when other people - more deserving people - need them most. They make the places look a mess and they keep annoying people for money. We try to make our streets and towns look nice, so we offer them jobs, places to sleep/ live and food.
[9:59] You: THEN
[9:59] You: But some of them don’t want it.
[9:59] You: on a sentence on its own
[9:59] Student004 Meredith: right
[10:03] You: We don’t do enough for homeless people, I think. It is up to us and our society to protect such vulnerable peopls
[10:03] Student004 Meredith accepted your inventory offer.
[10:03] You: right!
[10:03] You: when's the other essays due - could they wait until next week?
[10:03] Student004 Meredith: yea ive got them on me pen drive
[10:04] You: ok
[10:04] You: any probs in meantim, send to me
[10:04] Student004 Meredith: hold on
[10:04] You: I like dthe last W1 essay
[10:05] You: you NEED to think about the order of things in your Gladiator esay, and get the Film Techniques in there as well!
[10:05] Student004 Meredith: back mum phoned
[10:05] Student004 Meredith: right ok
[10:05] You: tell her I send my regards
[10:05] You: ok buddy
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[10:05] You: anyone else you know of wanting to join? we have a girl starting next week at this time
[10:06] Student004 Meredith: i gave someone your number but i dont think she wants to have an english tutor
[10:06] Student004 Meredith: u feeling better then last week
[10:07] You: MUCH MUCH better
[10:07] You: thanks for asking
[10:07] You: wee Camneron was sick last nite - and we're talking PROJECTILE vomit!!
[10:07] Student004 Meredith: poor little him
[10:08] You: well, let the girl/others know we also have History - I'm still trying to get a Maths tutor
[10:08] You: aye, I know!
[10:08] Student004 Meredith: right ok
[10:08] You: right go and read yer essays and let me know how you get on
[10:08] You: i wil post this chat on the blog
[10:08] Student004 Meredith: i was sick 2 days before my prelims